14 Mar 2008 02:22:53 | Neil Sagebiel
It's arguably the most important word in the copywriter's
arsenal. It ranks right at the top with words like "free," "new"
and "savings."
I'm talking about "you."
"You" is the word that gets your prospect's attention and keeps
them involved. As Herschell Gordon Lewis says in "The Art of
Writing Copy," "Unless the reader regards himself as the target
of your message, benefit can't exist. Benefit demands a 'We/You'
relationship."
While the "We" in the "We/You" relationship is important, it's
better implied than communicated literally. If your goal is to
put prospects first, then it's best to have the "you's" far
exceed the "we's."
It's the "you's" that matter to prospects. They're your
workhorse for communicating your message and include all
derivatives such as "your," "yours," "yourself," "you're," and
"you'll."
Powerful 'You'
What makes "you" so powerful? For one thing, it addresses your
readers directly. In effect, it says "Hey you," which is much
harder to ignore than "Hey somebody."
Say "Hey you" in a crowded room and a lot of heads will turn.
Say "Hey somebody" and a few heads might turn.
While your copy won't actually say "Hey you," it can clearly
identify to whom you're talking. Once you have your audience's
attention, use "you" to help keep it.
Personal 'You'
Why does "you" get and hold attention? For one thing, it's
personal. It's used in personal conversation every day. What do
you think? How was your weekend? You'll be
glad to know ...
When people say these things to you, they're bound to get your
attention and involvement. After all, they're interested in your
opinion. They're interested in the things you do. They have
something to tell you that will make you happy.
That's the goal of you-oriented copy. Address your audience
directly, personally and in terms of their interests. Be
conversational and "you" will pop up in the copy naturally.
Counting 'You'
It was mentioned earlier that "you" is a workhorse. A classic
example is contained in "The Do-It-Yourself Direct Mail
Handbook" by Murray Raphel and Ken Erdman. They highlight a
"Newsweek" magazine subscription letter used for nearly two
decades.
The subscription letter was written by direct mail expert Ed
McLean, who used "you" nearly 30 times on the first page alone.
More than 100 million copies of the letter were mailed, a
testament to its effectiveness.
Try counting the "you's" (and "you" derivatives) in your copy.
Compare them with the number of "we's" and first-person
derivatives. If the "you's" don't outnumber the "we's," consider
reworking your copy.
Excessive 'You'?
Can you overdo "you"? Yes.
If you load your copy with "you's" but forget the benefits, your
message will have a phony ring.
"You" can't save you if there's nothing meaningful to offer your
audience. Likewise, it will help put you over the top if there
is.
(c) 2005 Neil Sagebiel
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Neil Sagebiel is a veteran copywriter who has served clients
such as Microsoft, The Seattle Times, Lucent Technologies, March
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